If
If futility was a gun, you’d be holding it to my head
And if irony could mildly injure, then I’d already be dead
If integrity was sold at the supermarket, I’d steal some every day
Till I have enough to shut my eyes and hope this goes away
If bitter resolve was a place, I got lost on the way there
And if words could sell one out, then I’d be free to share
If love grew in the garden, then I must have watered it with lies
And the sun shines on it so beautifully that I just can’t shut my eyes
If perfect had a suitable definition, it would be your name
And if I got warm every time I thought of you, I’d go up in flames
But if hope was a rope to climb, then I’d have hanged myself today
And my eyes would still be open, so I’d never look away.
(C) Lady Chaos 2007
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Firstly. I love your PICS
Secondly, the written words
If
If futility was a gun, you’d be holding it to my head
And if irony could mildly injure, then I’d already be dead
If integrity was sold at the supermarket, I’d steal some every day
Till I have enough to shut my eyes and hope this goes away
FOR THE SAKE OF RHYTHM, I WOULD HAVE ADDED GOES FAR FAR AWAY.
THIS IS SUBJECTIVE, AND VERY PICKY, BUT SOMETIMES YOU HAVE TO BE…
If bitter resolve was a place, I got lost on the way there
And if words could sell one out, then I’d be free to share
TRY WORDS SELL ME OUT. MORE PERSONAL, DRAMATIC, NOT SO DISTANT!
If love grew in the garden, then I must have watered it with lies
LOVE THIS. MAYBE ANOTHER OPTION TEARS OF MY EYES FITS JUST AS WELL.
And the sun shines on it so beautifully that I just can’t shut my eyes
TRY LOOKS DOWN ON IT. BIT MORE POETIC?
If perfect had a suitable definition, it would be your name
LOVE THE SENTIMENT, BUT SUITABLE DEFINITON A BIT COLD. SUGGESTION?????? IF PERFECT HAD A DEFINEABLE PLACE, IT WOULD BE YOUR NAME— THIS HARD TO CHANGE, COULD USE
And if I got warm every time I thought of you, I’d go up in flames
BRILLIANT!
But if hope was a rope to climb, then I’d have hanged myself today
BRILLIANT- WORKS BEAUTIFULY
And my eyes would still be open, so I’d never look away.
LOVED THIS
THESHADOW
:) Thanks! I make a lot of photo manipulations… Photoshop is one of man’s greatest inventions.
Hmm… I see what you mean about the corrections, especially the one about tears, that would be a lot better. I guess at the time I just don’t think of the little things… (also I’m one of those people who doesn’t like to permanently edit my previous poems… it feels like airbrushing out the zits on a school photo - it ends up better, but is it the truth?) I’ve only recently started seriously considering the fact that people may actually read my poems, and maybe I shouldn’t make them so cryptic or situation-specific.
Thanks for your comments! I am always glad to learn!
Firstly, your style sorts out the men from the boys, the wheat from the chaff…
What i do, is i splurge, let it all pour out. Then, after it rests for a while, i tighten it up. Occasionaly, i will splurge (first draft) and be happy with it. But usualy, a second draft allows the serious writer to come to the fore, at the expense of the wannabe.
Might send you some of my pics to your lolie shop.
I might be able to write, but i havent come to grips with photo shop. You are one up on me.
theshadow- john
That’s a great idea to first write an “honest” draft, and then a “good” draft… I sort of try that when I think people are reading my poems, I do a “radio edit” (usually to cut out any unkind bits or info in there that identifies whoever or whatever I’m writing about) before I put them on the net. But I’ll try that… although I have a lot of fun during the “thinking about what to write” stage of my poems, before any writing happens.
Heh… it only took me six years to learn to use photoshop, and I’m still learning… I’ve never read an instruction manual or online help, so there’s always stuff I don’t know.
I had a look at the photos you sent me, and they are good! Especially the one of the sunset… nothing wrong with good old fashioned sunset or sunrise pictures. And I did like the house photo… it has an elegant rusticness to it. Would you like me to see what I can do and photoshop them a bit? Do you want to see them looking all wacky and strange?
I like to think I’m an okay photographer, but the thing with photoshop is that when it comes to manipulating a picture, it’s the “average” photos that end up looking the best. After all, if you take an awesome photo, what more can you do to make it better beyond turning up the contrast?
I think you’re gaining a fan club. I wish my words flowed like yours. Thanks for sharing.
:) Aww, thanks! *smiles*!